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AFTER RILKE'S Archaic torso of Apollo

We cannot guess its head god glaring gaze
Apple round ripe carved eyes. But yet the stare
Persists inherent in those pecs. It's there
Glows through stone muscles like the turned down blaze

Arclight could blind. There gentle still it burns
Warm as the sweetness of the sudden smile
That comes with loin thrust, glows continues while
The body shows self glimmers as it turns

Unwhole unshamed remaining still complete
White stone that dazzles sheen as silken skin
God like a star that burns from deep within
Its every inch a friendly face to greet
Admonish you voice echo out of far
Far distant time. Be other than you are

Date: 2016-12-01 11:43 am (UTC)
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Date: 2016-12-02 01:12 pm (UTC)
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It's very nice except that I think "You must change your life" is stronger, and more necessary than "be other than you are". I appreciate that that's impossible poetically in English, but I feel the punch of it is required.
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